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1、读后续写:飞走的鸽子题目:OneSaturdayafternoon,IwaswatchingTVinthelivingroomwithmygrandmawhenablindingflashoflightningflashedacrossthesky,followedbyadeafeningsound,andthepicturesonTVdisappearedwiththatsound.BeforeIrealizedwhathadhappened,agray-whiteshadowrushedinthroughtheopenwindowandflewovermyhead.Bang!Ithitth
2、ewallandslidofftothefloor.Shakingwithfear,Iapproacheditcautiouslyandsawthatitwasapigeon(鸽子).Itlookedatmeinfear,tryingtoopenitswingsandstrugglingitsfeet,butapparentlypowerless.(闪电中,鸽子闯入我家)SoIcalledmygrandmaandimmediatelysetouttogiveitahelpinghand.Takingitinmyhands,Ifeltafewdropsofwarmthonmyhands.Itwa
3、sblood!Igentlyspreaditswingsandtherewereafewredfeathersinside.uDon,tworry.We,llgetitoutalive,“Grandmasaidtome.Thenshegotthefirst-aidkit.Withsomecotton,Wedriedtheblood,cleanedthewoundandthenputitunderahairdryertodry.Allwentsmoothly,forthepigeonhadnostrengthlefttoresist.Therehappenedtobeanemptybirdcag
4、eathome,soIputitingentlyandaddedalittlewaterandsomegrains.(我和奶奶照顾受伤的鸽子)Forthenextfewdays,themomentIgothomefromschool,Iwouldruntofeedthepigeon.AndGrandmahelpedalot,tidyingupthecagedaily.1.ittlebylittle,itsstrengthreturned.Oneevening,IfeditwiththebiscuitIwaseating.Itenjoyedit!Oneweeklater,itswoundalmo
5、sthealed;itsfeathersgrewanditbecamebrave.WheneverIsatatthetableeatingbiscuits,itlookedupatme,cooing(咕咕地叫)constantly.Tbmyjoy,Icouldalsoreachintothecagetotouchit.WhenIgentlyfingereditshead,itplayfullypecked(啄)atme.Finallyitcompletelyrecovered.ButeverytimeIwaswithit,itseemedrestlessinthecage.Tomakeitha
6、ppyandpretty,Itiedanorangestringarounditsleg.(鸽子完全恢复了,但是在笼中焦躁丕安,我寄了一根绳子在它腿上)注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请在答题卡的相应位置作答。Pl:Oneday,howevenWhenIreturnedhome,GrandmametmeatIhedoort100kingembarrassed.P2:SUreenough,/ClDigeonfIyingimothehousethenextClften100n!审题:PlzOneday,however,whenIreturnedhome,Grandmametmeatthedo
7、or,lookingembG11zssed.但是一天,我回家时,奶奶在门口接我,看上去面色尴尬。Q:为什么尴尬?奶奶做了什么?在门口接我是为了及时向我解释什么?P2:Sureenough,Isawapigeonflyingintothehousethenextafternoon!果然,第二天下午我看见一只鸽子飞进了房子。Q:这是我之前救助过的鸽子吗?我怎么判断正是那只?它为什么飞“回”?前一天飞“走”了吗?怎么飞走的?跟奶奶面露尴尬有何联系?为什么用“果然”这个词?飞回来之后我做了什么?结局是怎样的?这个结局体现了“人与自然”主题中的具体哪个方面?范文:Orleday,howeverWhenI
8、returnedhome,Grandmametmeatthedoor,100kingembarrassed.然而,有一天当我回家时,奶奶在门口接我,显得彳艮尴尬。我问她发生了什么事。她转过身来,指着鸟笼,向我道歉说鸽子在她整理笼子时溜了出来,从打开的窗户飞走了。Iaskedherwhathadhappened.Sheturnedaroundandpointedtothebirdcage,apologizingtomethatthepigeonslidoutwhenshewastidyingupthecageandflewawaythroughtheopenwindow.不见了!我简直不敢相信我
9、的耳朵。我冲向鸟笼前。就是空的!Gone!Icouldn,tbelievemyears.Irushedovertothebirdcage.Justempty!我盯着剩下的水和谷物,眼泪顺着脸颊流下来。Istaredattheremainingwaterandgrains,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.“它去哪了?它会再次受伤吗?它会回来吗?我哭着问奶奶。“Wherehasitgone?Willitbehurtagain?Willitcomeback?.”IaskedGrandma,sobbing.“它会飞回来的!“她说服了我,轻轻地擦去了我的眼泪JTtWiIlflyba
10、Ck!”Sheconvincedme,wipingawaymytearsgentlySUreenough,ISavVapigeonflyingintothehouseIhenextafteEoon!果然,Z天下午我看见一只鸽子飞进了房子!它栖息在鸟笼附近,咕咕叫着。Itperchednearthebirdcage,cooing.尽管非常兴奋,我还是悄悄地走近它。Despitegreatexcitement,I叩PrOaCheditquietly.它是灰白色的,一条腿上系着一根橙色的绳子。我的鸽子回来了!Itwasgray-whiteandhadanorangestringtiedtoonele
11、g.Mypigeoncameback!“一定是饿了,“奶奶咧嘴笑了。我立刻用谷物喂它,然后踮起脚尖走到窗前,关上窗,催促奶奶把它关进笼子。“Itmustbehungry,Grandmagrinned.Immediately,Ifeditwithgrainsandthentiptoedtothewindowandclosedit,urgingGrandmatocageit.但她没有。“鸽子需要自由,”她耐心地向我解释说。BUtShCdidnt“Pigeonsneedfreedom,sheexplainedtomepatiently.我很犹豫,但看着那只鸽子徘徊,平静地啄着谷物,我意识到奶奶是对的
12、!我转向窗户,把它打开了。Iwashesitantbutlookingatthepigeonwanderingandpeckingatthegrainspeacefully,IrealizedGrandmawasright!Iturnedbacktothewindowandopenedit.读后续写评分标准总分为25分,按5个档次给分。第五档(21-25分)1 .与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理;2 .内容丰富,结构清晰,情节合理,语言流畅;3 .所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确;4 .有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)1 .与所给短文融洽
13、度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理;2 .内容比较丰富,结构比较清晰,情节比较合理,语言流畅;3 .所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达;4 ,比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分)1 .与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接;2 .写出了若干有关内容,情节符合逻辑;3 .应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义的表达;4 .应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分)1 .与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接;2 .写出了一些有关内容,有一定的故事情节;3 .语法结构单调、词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达;4 .较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分)1 .与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差;2 .产出内容太少,故事情节不清晰;3 .语法结构单调、词汇项目很有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达;4 .缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容不连贯。O分白卷、内容太少无法判断或所写内容与所提供内容无关。