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1、托福作文写作范文详解题目:Successfulsportsprofessionalscanearnagreatdealmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessions.Somepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedwhileothersthinkitisunfair.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.话题和题型分类工作类；双边讨论题型题目分析运动员收入高是否公平思路提示A.公平运动员年轻的时候体力消耗大，年老后患有职业病没有一技之长，退役后很难找工作为国家做贡献，给青少年起着
2、榜样作用B.不公平工资的高低应有所承担的社会责任来决定科学家和国家领导人的贡献比运动员更大SampleAnswerAsaresultofconstantmediaattention,sportsprofessionalshavebecomestarsandcelebrities,andthoseatthetoparepaidhugesalaries.Somepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedforsuccessfulsportsprofessionalstoearnmuchmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessionsw
3、hileotherholdanoppositeviews.Iaminfavoroftheviewthatitisfairforsportsprofessionalstoearnagreatdealofmoney.（首段开篇摆明观点:成功的运动员获得巨额的收入是合乎情理的）Manypeoplefindtheirrewardsunfair,especiallywhencomparingthesesupersalarieswiththoseoftopsurgeonsorresearchscientists,orevenleadingpoliticianswhohavetheresponsibilit
4、yofgoverningthecountry.Howeverzathletes/salariesarenotdeterminedbyconsideringthecontributiontosocietyapersonmakeszorthelevelofresponsibilityheorsheholds.Instead,theyreflectthepublicpopularityofthesportingeneralandthelevelofpublicsupportthatsuccessfulstarscangenerate.Sothenotionof“fairness“isnottheis
5、sue.（文章第二段从作者观点的反面切入，再进行正面论述，使得论述更加客观辩证）Thosewhofeelthatsportsstarssalariesarejustifiedmightarguethatthenumberofprofessionalswithrealtalentisveryfewzandthemoneyisrecognitionoftheskillsanddedicationapersonneedstobesuccessful.Competitionisconstantandaplayeristestedeverytimetheyperformintheirrelatively
6、shortcareer.Thepressurefromthemediaisintenseandthereislittleprivacyoutofthespotlight.Thusallofthesefactorsmayjustifythehugeearnings.（本段是文章第三段列出三个论据论证作者观点）Personally,Ithinkthattheamountofmoneysuchsportsstarsisjustifiednotonlybecauseoftheburdenfrommediaandthepublic,butalsobecauseoftheintensityoftraini
7、ngandcompetition.Thehugesalaryalsoindicatesthatoursocietyplacesmuchvalueonsport.（最后一段总结全文突出观点）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文的语言简洁明了观点清晰,文中一系列的连接词使得文章更加连贯:howeverzso,insteadzthuszbutoSomepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedforsuccessfulsportsprofessionalstoearnmuchmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessionswhileotherho
8、ldanoppositeviews.Iaminfavoroftheviewthatitisfairforsportsprofessionalstoearnagreatdealofmoney.句型Iaminfavoroftheviewthat可用于议论文开头提出观点。逻辑结构本文是总分总结构的议论文。开篇先陈述事实并表达观点，第二段从反面切入后转向正面，第三段继续从正面论述观点，使得论证更加客观严谨。第四段对全文进行总结，并重申自己的观点。ReadingAnimalfossilsusuallyprovideverylittleopportunitytostudytheactualanimalti
9、ssues,becauseinfossilstheanimalslivingtissueshavebeenlargelyreplacedbyminerals.Thus,scientistswereveryexcitedrecentlywhenitappearedthata70-million-year-oldfossilofTyrannosaurusrex(T.rex)zadinosaur,mightstillcontainremainsoftheactualtissuesoftheanimal.Thediscoverywasmadewhenresearchersdeliberatelybro
10、keopentheT.rexzslegboneztherebyexposingitsinsidestorevealmaterialsthatseemtoberemainsofbloodvessels,redbloodcells,andcollagenmatrix.First,thebreakingofthefossilizedlegbonerevealedmanysmallbranchingchannelsinside,whichprobablycorrespondtohollowsintheboneswherebloodvesselswereoncelocated.Theexcitingfi
11、ndingwasthepresenceofasoft,flexibleorganicsubstanceinsidethechannels.ThissoftsubstancemayverywellrepresenttheremainsoftheactualbloodvesselsofT.rex.Second,microscopicexaminationofthevariouspartsoftheinnerbonerevealedthepresenceofspheresthatcouldbetheremainsofredbloodcells.Testsshowedthatthespherescon
12、tainediron-amaterialvitaltotheroleofredbloodcellsintransportingoxygentotissues.Moreover,thesphereshaddarkredcenters(substanceswithirontendtobereddishincolor)andwerealsoaboutthesizeofredbloodcells.Third,scientistsperformedatestonthedinosaurlegbonethatshowedthatitcontainedcollagen.Collagenisafibrouspr
13、oteinthatisamaincomponentoflivingbonetissue,inwhichitformsaso-calledcollagenmatrix.Collagen(oritschemicalderivatives)isexactlythekindofbiochemicalmaterialthatonewouldexpecttofindinassociationwithbonetissue.ListeningAsmuchaswewouldliketohavetheremainsofactualdinosaurtissue,therearesoundreasonsforbein
14、gskepticaloftheidentificationsmadeinthereading.First,thesoft,flexiblesubstanceinsidethebonechannelsisnztnecessarilytheremainsofbloodvessels.Itismuchmorelikelytobesomethingelse.Ijkewhat?Youmightsay.Wellzlongafteranorganismisdied,bacteriasometimescolonizehollows,emptyareasinbones,likethechannelsthaton
15、ceheldbloodvessels.Whenbacterialivedinsidebones,theyoftenleavebehindtracesoforganicmaterial.Whattheresearchersinthereadingareidentifyingasbloodvesselsmightjustbetracesofsoftandmoistresidueleftbybacteriacolonies.Allright.Whatabouttheiron-filledspheres?Well,theproblemisthatscientistsfoundidenticalredd
16、ishspheresinfossilsofotheranimalsfoundinthesameplace.Thatincludesfossilsofprimitiveanimalsthatdidnothaveanyredbloodcellswhentheywerealive.Clearlyzifthesespheresappearinorganismsthatdidnothaveanyredbloodcells,thenthespherescannotbetheremainsofredbloodcells.Thespheresprobablyhaveaverydifferentorigin.Theyareprobablyjustpiecesofreddishmineral.Third,thecollagen.Theproblemisthatwehaveneverfoundcollageninanimalremainsthata
